I see that you are working this vampire angle with some success. And kudos. Lots of girls love that sensitive-undead thing. But I'd drop the whole musician angle if I were you. Vampire rock stars are played out, and besides, you can't possible be very good.

“Clary hadn't realized quite how disheveled she looked: her coat streaked with d…”

“You’re in my bones and my blood and my heart,” he said. “I’d have to tear mysel…”

“There's plenty of sense in nonsense sometimes, if you wish to look for it.”

“I should have guessed you were Jace's sister," he said. "You both have the same…”